Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Numerous scientific articles prove that there is a close correspondence between our nature and progression. It seems to me that both learned and born traits are determined people's behavior, and I will elucidate why in this essay.

Admittedly, scientists support that characteristics which could be traced back to genetics and natural progression may affect partly to individual behavior, particularly young children. They point to evidence from children, who was born in affluent families and raised in a positive enriching environment, still embark on a career of crime and self-destruction. Furthermore, the genetic difference shows its effect from as early as one's preschool years, throughout adolescence and into an adult. To the supporter of the idea, these effects are convincing.

Despite the strong proof of nature is responsible for one's behavior, it can be denied the function of environment people raised up. For example, twins an early age could resemble each other in both appearance and behavior. However, if they separated into different environments and education, they would be able to expose dissimilar behavior. Moreover, many studies have cited evidence that juvenile crimes come from problem families, who have a history of violence and crime, albeit they used to be obedient children. Conversely, if those are acquired adequate knowledge through education, they would behave in positive ways.

Overall, I would tend to the side that both nature and nurture play a decisive part in one's behavior development. It would be not logical to ignore the environment cannot be influent on our progression

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, still, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48207171315 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05700510854 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.645418326693 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6227771029 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.846153846 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.095795307337 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326997781111 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376316645548 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592708271493 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00691923895891 0.056905535591 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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