Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers Subjects such as music and sports are not useful To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Subjects such as music and sports are not useful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that students performance in their future career are strongly influenced by what they have learnt in schools. While some people have a preference for concentrating on the irrelevant to students future jobs, I believe that learning extra curriculum subject will be beneficial in some extents.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that school learners need to put more time on figure out what they need to do in the future. Some people want to be scientists or biologists, they need to have a basic academic subject such as mathematics, biology…which was taught in the high school before enrolling the universities or entering a job market. By mastering some aspects of your jobs, it was a time-saving for you to pursue the dreams on professional area, compared to those who did not acknowledge the essential of learning such subjects at schools. Moreover, those subjects equip learners with higher-level qualifications and boost their work performance, which is what most employers expect these days.

On the other hands, people should be considered that extra curriculum subjects can also provided student with substantial skills and abilities that are transferable across their future occupations. By playing group sports, people may improve their interpersonal skills, in particular teamwork ability and leadership competency, whereas music appreciation s conductive in releasing people's worries and refreshing their mind. Furthermore, the aim of education is not only helping students to successfully attain a job after they graduated, but also play an integral part of both physical and psychological aspects.

In conclusion, although no one can negate benefits of teaching academic in schools, the potential merits of extra subjects should be considerable.

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Average: 5 (4 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
It is sometimes argued that students performance in their future career are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, whereas, while, in conclusion, in particular, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50724637681 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1360909047 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623188405797 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.7958577343 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.0 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315386119086 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113848250988 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512826151034 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179328928669 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327217353103 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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