Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future career. Subjects such as music and sports are not useful. To what extent do you agree of disagree?
Nowadays, some people are rather critical of the course curriculum adopted by most schools. They believe that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future career, rather than those subjects such as music and sports which are not useful.
Academic subjects are useful for students’ future careers because they provide students with the knowledge they will need to pursue tertiary and vocational courses. Such courses offer students the opportunity to gain academic and professional qualifications which are often essential to finding good jobs.
However, if students are to achieve career-wise success in the future, they need a lot more than what they can learn form academic subjects. Obviously they will also need to have good health, an optimistic outlook on things, perseverance, the ability to cooperate with others and the courage to face competition. Subjects such as music and sports give them the perfect opportunity to learn and develop these essential qualities.
There is another way in which subjects such as music and sports may benefit a student’s future career. Generally speaking, no one could tell in advance what career path a student will follow in the future. Now that music-related and sports-related industries are among the most prosperous in the world, at least some students will find themselves eventually working in fields related to music or sports. Therefore, the music or sports lessons they had at school can help them with their jobs, even though they absolutely had no anticipation of this at school.
My conclusion is that while schools concentrate on teaching students academic subjects, they should also recognize the importance of subjects such as music and sports, and should definitely include such courses in the curriculum because they can be equally valuable for the students’ future career success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to form'
Suggestion: to form
...eed a lot more than what they can learn form academic subjects. Obviously they will ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, at least, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47651006711 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83340730007 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543624161074 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6531776131 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450099082639 0.244688304435 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180719429968 0.084324248473 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169487486072 0.0667982634062 254% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293138713015 0.151304729494 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115345868984 0.056905535591 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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