Schools should focus more on teaching students how to be successful in the workforce and less on helping them to achieve academic success.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Looking from an educational perspective, it is generally believed that students should be taught how to become productive employees rather than placing their emphasis on academic performance. From my point of view, this statement fails to manifest its validity due to a number of reasons which will be discussed on the following paper.
For a variety of reasons, outstanding academic results may provide more employment opportunities for students. This is due to the fact that a great number of recruiters nowadays tend to prioritise candidates who are well-equipped with technical expertise. Therefore, owning good qualifications will help facilitate student’s job application once they graduate from school. Futhermore, students with extraordinary achievements in their academic training might be able to draw public attention. Hence, these people can take advantage of their reputation to make a fortune.
Apart from the abovementioned concerns, an escalation in numbers of academic achievers can also improve the quality of workforce. This is mainly because highly qualified school leavers can diversify the labour forces, giving organisations various options when it comes to recruitment. As a result, it is unlikely for numerous companies to face the risk of lacking human resources. Another reason to support the focus of educational institutions on academic merits is that once a student’s achievements are widely recognised, the schools will also be the beneficiaries as they can gain more fame for their quality education. Hence, these educational organisations can attract more students to enroll in the schools
Taking everything into consideration, this reinforces my perspective that academic results play an important role not only in promoting students’ career path but also in building schools’ reputation.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, apart from, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78308823529 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24735177906 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636029411765 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7458274744 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.083333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185779373767 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645384140962 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541258155394 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108494289103 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272384170006 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, apart from, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78308823529 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24735177906 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636029411765 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7458274744 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.083333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185779373767 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645384140962 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541258155394 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108494289103 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272384170006 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.