Science finds that by studying the behavior of three-year-old children they can predict if they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent is criminality related to human nature? Is it possible to stop children from being a criminal when they grow up?
Some scientific researches recently have reported that they can predict whether children will be an offender through studies are carried out on children as they are 3 years old. While some negative innate traits increase the rate of crime to a certain extent, it is supposed that we can mitigate this trend by some interventions.
There is a popular belief that humans’ nature determines whether or not they will grow up to be criminals. Firstly, children who are cruel have higher incidence to turn into violent crimes than other kind individuals. Bullying is a typical example, children who usually threaten other boys or girls by acts of violence can be found guilty of violence in the future. Secondly, laziness and selfishness among children possibly breed future criminals since they tend to make easy money instead of working hard. These innate characteristics are considered causes that increase the number of offensive activites like drug trafficking or thief.
Nevertheless, we completely help children to reduce the possibility of being criminals in their future in some ways. Firstly, it is undoubted that parental involvement plays an integral part in shaping children’s personalities. Hence, first and foremost, governments should provide parents with short courses regarding to parental skills so that they are equipped with appropriate approaches to bring up their own offsprings. Secondly, governments should impose the full weight of the laws to act as a deterrence, which enables children to understand severe consequences of criminality. Besides, school systems should implement more extra-curricular activities relating to laws to raise children’s awareness about crime and punishment.
In conclusion, it is clear that humans’ nature significantly effects on the rate of crime, however, we can mitigate this problem by some remedies on the base of education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5275862069 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05269807175 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631034482759 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.1094647111 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 123.307692308 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347009366766 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108721166409 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104260364506 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182178172603 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848553775848 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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