Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people's health. Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them, while others say education does not work. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion
It is irrefutable that junk food is harmful to people’s health. It contains a lot of fats and salts which are detrimental to health. Therefore some people say that people should be educated and made aware of its harmful effects. However, others opine that education does not help in making people eat less junk food. In the following paragraphs I intend to discuss both issues and finally give my opinion.
Some opine that educating people about the harmful effects of junk food can help in reducing its use. The fact is that people don’t actually know what goes in the making of fast food. Fast foods are high in calories and low in nutrition. These foods are rich in harmful substances such as fat, salt, and sugar. Preservatives are also added in junk food. All these things can cause heart diseases, cancer, diabetes, and obesity. Obesity is one of the major problems in the world today. It is very important to reduce eating Junk foods for the healthy life. So, if people are warned about their bad effects, they would eat less of it. This can be done with the help of media such as TV which is ubiquitous nowadays.
On the other hand some believe that educating people won’t help because junk food is very cheap, tasty and readily available. After a hectic days work no one is in a mood to spend time in the kitchen and so junk food is very convenient. It is also not very expensive and children love it. What is more, fast food outlets spend a lot to lure people with their ads. What people don’t realize is that the celebs they use in these ads hardly ever eat such food themselves and if they do, then they also spend hours working out in the gym every day.
After considering the convenience of fast foods, I believe that educating people would not help. It would be better if these fast food outlets were educated about making fast food healthier. Strict rules should be laid down against using trans-fatty acids and saturated fats. Whole wheat breads could be used instead of white breads. Use of preservatives should be lessened and juices should be served along with such foods instead of carbonated drinks.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, fast food is harmful but still people eat it. Therefore, educating people would not help. Measures should be taken to improve the fast food. After all, all fast food is not bad.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: day
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, after all, such as, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66983372922 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33388363556 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49406175772 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0946979422 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.7931034483 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5172413793 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20689655172 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399364968257 0.244688304435 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115917844346 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921921260329 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266714916264 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117685704157 0.056905535591 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 13.0946893788 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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