Some believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that it is a result of person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is argued whether an increase in criminals is due to social problems and destitution or person’s nature. While some think that crime results from innate characteristics, I believe that people is prone to be negatively affected by bad issues in society and deprivation.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why it is believed that a person commits a crime because of his/her nature. The first reason is that many educated people occupying high positions in corporations and society still infringe a legislation because of their bad temper and cruel. Although such criminals have glamorous life with much property, valuable materials, For example, Chief of Police of Dong Luong Commune in Thanh Hoa, Vietnam murdered a preschool teacher due to an affection-related conflict over six months ago. Another reason is that overbearing people always want to control others in an unpleasant way. Take school violence as an illustration, many imperious students hurt and harm others in the same school on purpose only because such students do not like the affected students.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that social problems and shortage of material wealth are the key impacts on person’s violation of laws. Firstly, some problems in society leads to a rise in crime rate. For instance, some negative effects from the family such as lack of ethical behavior, lack of domestic harmony, shortage of respect for each other, some members’ excessive indulgence in drinking, gambling negatively affect perception and acts of young members. Consequently, such young persons are prone to fall into crime such as drug addiction, alcoholism. Secondly, people choose the way to break the law with the aim of earning money to meet their basic needs or have glamorous life. Many artists or hot girls accept to rape to use branded goods, live luxury homes, other criminals murder others for robbery.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that nature causes crime. However, I argue that social problems and deprivation make a great contribution to an increase in criminals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25748502994 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87799780802 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59880239521 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6613330823 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.066666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1333333333 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240416576136 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819499883852 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695223587328 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157433392576 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0895884737383 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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