Some believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draw attention to problems. Others think that celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is argued that famous people’s involvement in global aid organizations attracts the community’s attention. While some think that celebrities make more people know about issues, I believe that their participation could bring some benefits to society.
On the one hand, the significance of problems can be lessened by famous people. The first reason is that most people consider the main purpose of celebrities’ support as a way to enhance their reputations. They make much endeavor to be known more about their images rather than their emotion, serious behavior to issues such as poverty reduction, plague. Another reason is that the association of celebrities with international aid organizations may shifted away the focus of the community from their efforts to the fame and public images.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that society can gain more advantages thanks to well-known persons’ involvement in global aid organizations. Firstly, fans are powerfully influenced by celebrities’ acts and behaviors because they repose trust in their iconic figures. Take as My Tam – Vietnamese legendary singer as an illustration, she helped underprivileged children in mountainous areas through a project, and a variety of youngsters from her fan clubs took part in this project by volunteering or donating their money. Secondly, famous voices are often more trustworthy and more compelling, so the profile of aid organizations can be raised. The local and international communities may learn more about projects and denote money or perform charitable acts.
In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks to celebrity participation in international aid organization, it seems to me that it is conducive to the community when they perform voluntary acts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61029411765 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38414274896 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613970588235 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.240504317 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.166666667 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228657714715 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886093671822 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582430336793 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155645453136 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723354497978 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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