Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that watching TV on a regular basis in school and at home is the efficient way to improve children’s learning quality. Personally, I completely agree with this view.
There are a variety of educational and attractive channels on TV which are appropriate for children. First, informative programs shown will give countless opportunities to children in order to acquire critical understanding. Take VTV7 as an example, this channel is designed with the aim of providing viewers with useful knowledge of different subjects such science, drawing, geology, cuisine, and English. Second, children’s appetite is possible to be increased thanks to beautiful graphic designs, amazing and good sounds, and attractive program framework. It enables viewers to both learn and relax slightly, which make a contribution to improve efficiency of learning. Books might be exciting and informative, but it is less likely to draw children’s attention because it needs the reader’s high concentration.
Channels on TV are always censored more heavily than on other media such as online newspaper, so information and image shown on it are controlled to ensure their accuracy and healthiness. Most of programs are edited carefully so that their efficiency can be gained, their concepts meet viewers’ needs while a vast of websites often supply information in a free way, probably by any individuals, and are difficult to verify them. Therefore, parents and schools can have peace of mind when selecting TV channels for their children.
In conclusion, I believe that watching TV in school and at home are advantageous for learning, and children should watch proper channels on TV habitually.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52651515152 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21208324377 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7501424499 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.583333333 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370849650527 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133669401137 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142223444495 0.0667982634062 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271917915862 0.151304729494 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133901531566 0.056905535591 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.