When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people think that the salary is the key consideration to make a decision on what a chosen career is. Personally, I believe that in addition to money, other factors are also equally decisive.
On the one hand, it is undeniable about the necessity of money to meet human’s basic demands on life. Most employees wish to have high or good salary to cover their living costs, and meet their material and spiritual needs. Money, for example, is needed to pay for monthly bills, rent, food costs, and health care services. If people decide on their jobs because of their enthusiasm for such careers or their enjoyment without much caring about the salary offered, they might have no enough money to raise their family and live in a pleasant way.
On the other hand, other factors are necessary to be considered as important as the salary. Firstly, personal relationships and working atmosphere are crucial when deciding on an occupation. A manager or host with a thoughtful attitude and friendly and good-humored colleagues, for example, make a great contribution to determine whether people want to work or not. Secondly, passion and enjoyment for a career, position, professional achievements, skills they learn are also taken into account to gain their job satisfaction. Vietnamese athletes, for instance, are often paid low salaries, even it is difficult to cover living costs, but they still attempt to become professional.
In conclusion, while I accept that salary is an element affecting option of a job, but I believe that it cannot outweigh other factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a pleasant way" with adverb for "pleasant"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12403100775 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82756653398 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616279069767 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1226703247 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0833333333 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0946742411053 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341103604255 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324754429902 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0619376952858 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126381395008 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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