Some believe that students should be taught how to compete while others say that they should be taught to cooperate. What is your opinion?
People have different views about whether to promote competition or cooperation in childhood education.While some people regard competition as an unhealthy part of adolescence,I believe that cultivation with method embracing both two senses is more likely to create a useful adult.
On one hand, placing kids in a competitive situation prepares them for an adult life in our highly capitalistic society that thrives on competition.Pursuit of championship is a part of human's natural instinct and exists normally in our everyday life.In a short-time level, competing with others provides kids with quantities of challenges,that would continuously motive them to explore their potential and present self-competence in various way.As for occupational implications, people who are sensitive to their rival's threatening appeal to be more aggressive, hence get a higher possibility of promotion.
But there is concern that excessive competitions in childhood might lead to "win-at-all-cost" mentality. With basic cooperative-oriented education complement competitive values, children are prone to hold healthier interpretation to success and failure.Instead of tying their self-esteem up with their ability to beat others, they learn to communicate,and build trust and empathy with their partner.Mention that those qualities are of vital importance when making up social networks in their adulthood. Additionally,efficient team work often guarantees better productivity. Knowing how to collaborate with peers on common tasks will save them a lot of time yet provide exceptional outcomes. Additionally,
Consequently,I admit that emphasis on collaboration or championship either makes its sense.But the greatest wisdom is to combine these two together, introduce competition gradually while still focusing on cooperation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, so, still, while, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.171875 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.98556201681 2.80592935109 142% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.7109375 0.561755894193 127% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.37355996 49.4020404114 357% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 225.714285714 106.682146367 212% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 36.5714285714 20.7667163134 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0599362237238 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0217729991422 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0191243193004 0.0667982634062 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333897786973 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156075339264 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.9 13.0946893788 198% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 9.56 50.2224549098 19% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.9 11.3001002004 185% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.1 12.4159519038 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.84 8.58950901804 138% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 9.78957915832 322% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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