In today's highly ever-changing world, the enhancement of living standards always asscociated with all other aspects of life. Recreation is an example in point. With latter-day technology and massive advent of virtual world. And the issue as to whether youngsters used to be utilizing smartphones during the day can bring with its drawbacks or advantages has remained a source of controversy. Personally, I'm of the belief that It has a diasadvantageous impacts on all terms of children's life in this situation. I write up a few causes and managements in essay below.
To begin with, There has several reasons I have to mention immediately because of serious features. With the appearance of virtual games and getting more popular in society as well as a new approach to youngsters, typically in minors. By abusing the marketing campaign and using sexually explicit advertisements through online platforms or recreational websites such as Facebook or Youtube. This can not only make the contributors to the profit and enhance the company's image but also become children more attractive and addtive to satify your curiosity and make new friends from all over the world in virtual world, thereby, they may be able to sitting in front of computer screen or stick their eyes on smartphones, which contains virtual images and highly technical factors. For these reaons, It is too catchy enough for their childrens and this will create a harmful progress in a long period of time.
By these aforementioned reasons, It brings with its detrimental values. Due to impulsive habitats, It will be the original of diseases such as: eyee-illness, backache or headache,...And when they lose a game or mentally provoked, it may form a sense of irritability. Furthermore, When they spend too much time wasting into these tecnological tools, they will become an introverted person, who always tend to be embarrassed whenever interact with other people or less energetic about taking part in extracurricular or daily activities. This can lead to be a sedentary lifstyle in near future.
In conclusion, I don't deny on technological tools that play a vital role with children and decide of whether have an more opportunity for a carreer path by convenient functions and being multi-use, But it can appear as some counterproductive influences for them when using for those purposes except in education and life-long learning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'harmful progress'.
Suggestion: harmful progress
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 388.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20103092784 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1231754159 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618556701031 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.7806914331 49.4020404114 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.125 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122767518749 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371431484289 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393880206282 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711403203725 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327872643457 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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