In some countries, advertisers increase the amount of advertising which tries to persuade children to buy snacks, toys and other goods. Parents object to such pressure on children. But some advertisers claim that there is useful information in these advertisements.
It is true that the amount of advertisements which target children is increasing, and that parents regard this as a pressure to which they strongly object. However, advertisers reason that advertisements are an effective way of passing useful information about the products for consumers. I believe that despite its merits, advertising aiming at children should be more rigorously controlled.
On the one hand, it is true that advertisements, for the most part, serve to provide viewers with useful knowledge about the product itself. For example, without the advertising video for Grow Plus milk, which clearly states the purpose of the product is for underweight and undernourished teenagers, parents would more likely to mistake its function as other general dairy products’. As a result, obese children who happen to drink that milk are the most likely to suffer. A further example would be the advantage of the caution content presented in most children-targeted advertisements. As children’s bodies have not yet fully developed, any medical complications associated with the misuse of products could have a long-term impact on children’s further development.
However, it is no doubt that advertisements have undesirable outcomes for both parents and children. Firstly, they perhaps place financial as well as mental burdens on parents. Although parents can afford to satiate their children’s desire to buy things, surely most of them are not pleased to spend their hard-earned money on something of little or no material use. Secondly, advertisements could spark competition between children. When a child brags about their newly afforded toy, others would probably feel a sense of envy, thus causing them to ask their parents for one. Unfortunately, such competitions promote a culture of materialism and consumerism which they could barely get rid of in their later.
In conclusion, advertisements for children have both positive and negative impacts. Therefore, it is sensible to introduce stricter regulations to mitigate undesirable outcomes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to toy'
Suggestion: to toy
... child brags about their newly afforded toy, others would probably feel a sense of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63694267516 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30673867583 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601910828025 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.943977724 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.625 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291148311856 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101993509211 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816637597612 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192674722319 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974981126031 0.056905535591 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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