Allowing the elderly to work as long as they desire has been on the rise in some nations. While several people think this is beneficial, I believe the unemployment rate this trend induces outweighs its advantages.
On the one hand, there are a couple of benefits when older people have the right to decide their retirement. The first one is happiness. This means that many old adults these days enter the work to fulfill their passion, leading to positive consequences on their mental abilities that can improve their lifestyles. Moreover, devoting to work enables people, regardless of age, to express patriotism for their nation. An increasing number of Japanese elderly, for instance, apply for charity organizations to contribute themselves to society by giving hands to those who face difficulty and guiding them to positive attitudes that promote the country overall.
On the other hand, I believe the aforementioned advantages pale in comparison with the drawback of this trend. The primary one is that it can lead to increased unemployment rates. As younger workers have to compete with the elderly who are loaded with years of experience, they are less likely to become the ultimate candidates that meet the work’s requirements. Being unemployed for a long duration can lessen graduates’ motivation and enthusiasm for pursuing their favorite jobs, resulting in many people burdening on their families and country.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that allowing the elderly to work until they want is more disadvantageous overall considering its risks to youngsters and society at large.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2734375 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91413580672 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61328125 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9947315615 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20951788919 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663008126388 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625552449365 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131369959874 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539269158079 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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