In some countries, children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.
In today’s world, there is a public debate about children's rights. In fact, in some countries, children who are under 16 years old are not allowed to leave their schools and earn money by getting a full-time job by law of the government. In this essay, an attempt will be made to investigate the advantages as well as disadvantages of this issue.
To begin with, the most frequent factor contributing to this phenomenon is that it may increase the financial burden to countries whose children there have a big contribution to the finance. In fact, the latest International Labour Organization global estimates on child labour indicate that African has the largest number of children labour force: 72,1 million African children are estimated to be in child labour, which accounts for nearly 17% of total workforce in Africa. As this example reveals, if children in this country get full-time study at school and do not work any longer, this country will have to face up with the economic downturn. Therefore, it is obvious that the law related to this issue can bring negative aspects to nations.
On the other hand, children under 16 years old are prohibited from leaving school to get full-time work. One explanation to support this statement is that this development might reduce the risks of being exposed to social crime such as prostitution, child trafficking, sexual abuse, thief, smuggling, drug addiction and so on. In reality, according to the statistics of UNICEF in 2005, there were 1.2 million children who are trafficked every year. Moreover, 2 million children, the major of them are girls, are sexually exploited in the multibillion-dollar commercial sex industry. Consequently, it is clear that the law which does not allow children to leave school until 16 could prevent them from this danger.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that the law required children under 16 years old not to leave their schools can bring both benefits and drawbacks. However, I am of the view that this is a good thing for our society because it can protect children from the risks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, in fact, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01714285714 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82233656276 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6710011555 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.428571429 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445852447007 0.244688304435 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153466115762 0.084324248473 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139530409506 0.0667982634062 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279975604029 0.151304729494 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578264101865 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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