Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.

Essay topics:

Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.

In some countries so many parent encourage their children from young age to have a job they believe that starting form young age it will help them to coup with adulthood but some believe that young adult shouldn’t work they have to put all of their time and effort in education and founding their interest so they could found a better job in the future. This essay will discuss this opposing points of views.

For centuries majority of parents always encouraged their children to found a job and work from young age so they could help their families but as the centuries pass that age that they send their children to work has become higher. now days parent only encourage their children to work only to help the become prepared for the time that they become adult and enter the work force as a result their children become more independent and grow up faster and independent consequently can move out of their parents house easier .

However, working since teenage years can have some draws backs because the society is developing and so many jobs need special skills as a result are children need to learn those skills so they could obtain a good job for their future. Therefore, learning this skill need time so they need to concentrate all of their time for learning so they don’t have time for going to part time job.

To conclude in the modern society and all the developing technology the young adult need to put all of their energy for gaining as much as knowledge as they can as fast as they can. Because the competition is fierce for founding a good job so working in part time job is not a good idea .

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun parent seems to be countable; consider using: 'many parents'.
Suggestion: many parents
In some countries so many parent encourage their children from young age...
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Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Now
...eir children to work has become higher. now days parent only encourage their childr...
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n move out of their parents house easier . However, working since teenage years...
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Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... they don't have time for going to part time job. To conclude in the modern socie...
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Line 7, column 255, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...e for founding a good job so working in part time job is not a good idea .
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Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...king in part time job is not a good idea .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, so, therefore, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60824742268 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31702661421 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429553264605 0.561755894193 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.1018458013 49.4020404114 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.625 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.375 20.7667163134 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146824561789 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849614847817 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643592575651 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108112010094 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434748210201 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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