In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
In many parts of the world today, there is a growing tendency of people suffering from health issues due to the excessive consumption of fast food. Some people hold the view that government should impose a higher tax on such kind of food in order to force people to think twice before buying fast food. I am of the opinion that this measure will not significantly help the situation and imparting about the health problems associated with this sort of food and even prohibit eateries from producing fast food are two better ways to improve this issue.
First of all, I would argue that imposing tax on fast food may turn out to be ineffective. Higher tax would probably affect the poor and middle class people as they do not have adequate money to spend on fast food which consists of no nutritional value. They might have to cook themselves proper meals, which may seem to be inconvenient at first but in the long term may have a positive impact on their health. Nevertheless, this is not the case with affluent people. Due to the good looking appearance, delicious taste and the convenience that fast food offers, they would not hesitate to spend a larger amount of money on such kind of food.
There are a number of measures that would be able to tackle the health problems arising out of fast food consumption. The first way is imparting about the health issues, such as obesity, diabetes, which people may have a high chance to suffer by eating junk food. Knowing about the severity when consuming this kind of food, people would be more careful to choose a healthier and more balanced way to eat in order to protect them and their family. Another possible measure is for government and authorities to prohibit this kind of food to be produced because of the fact that fast food is likely to consist of toxic ingredients that may exert negative effect on people’s health. Ajinomoto, for example, which is a substance found in fast food to make it more flavorful, is considered to be a slow poison and it can even cause cancer.
From what has been discussed above, I believe that imposing tax on fast food is not an effective way to prevent people from consuming this sort of food and educating people about health problems relating to fast food or even banning them are two better measures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...ohibit this kind of food to be produced because of the fact that fast food is likely to consist of toxic...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, for example, kind of, sort of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65847665848 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44944291611 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484029484029 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8588634403 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.428571429 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0714285714 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403949705909 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157825445054 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783980901843 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283369264374 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679486113274 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 11.3001002004 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.