In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in?
The significant development of cutting-edge technology has affected people’s lives irresebly ,even the way parents nurture their children. In some areas, parents want their kids to spend most of the time studying rather than enjoy free time. From my point of view, it not only has a positive impact on children’s future but also the society.
There are several valid reasons why focusing totally on attaining knowledge could bring enormous benefits to children. To begin with, if children have a qualified academic qualification, they could have a high-paying occupation in the future. For example, doctor, engineer, scientist are considered permanent jobs with ideal salaries. However, these professions required valuable academic results, so only people having suitable qualifications could work for these kinds of jobs. Therefore, children spending a lot of time studying could have high income and suffer from less social hardship. Moreover, when children spend most of their time on attaining knowledge, they might have less time playing video games. As a result, they could have less risk of getting eye’s problems like short-sightedness, long-sightedness.
Moreover, the increasing number of well-educated children has a positive impact on the society that they live in. In fact, along with the significant development of technology are various risks for children especially on the internet. As kids spend a long time studying in and after school, they could have less time using social media therefore avoid the approach of cyber crimes who could spoil them. As a result, social instability might be protected. Furthermore, the number of people’s success is associated with the development of a nation. If children have a good occupation, they could help the government and local authorities take care of the local people. For instance, in this epidemic period, doctors and nurses are giving exaggerated contributions to the healthcare systems.
In conclusion, studying well and hard could help children have good jobs in the future, therefore not only improve their own life but also bring numerous benefits to society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50909090909 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97165056336 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.1725737727 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373523356899 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111785810524 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095498114345 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222190379602 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077944881947 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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