In some countries people’s weight has significantly increased while their levels of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem and what solutions can you suggest solving them?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is true that in many countries, people tend to get more weight and their health problems are going to increase. There are several causes for this tendency, some measures need to be implemented to tackle this problem.
There are two primary reasons why people are going to get heavier and their health is turning bad. One reason is that in modern life, people often have fast food as their meal instead of eating healthy foods. For instance, the United Kingdom, a developed country, has estimated that 30% children in their country got obesity due to these children usually take junk foods every day. Another reason is that with the development of technology, people are becoming lazier and not often having outdoor activities. Most of the people in rich countries prefer to use a car to travel around the city in lieu of walking or spend their whole day watching television rather than playing sports. Therefore this passive lifestyle is one of the most reasons for heart and respiratory diseases.
Some measures could be adopted in order to encourage people to stop this problem. Firstly, the government should publish new policies to reduce the harmful effects of junk foods. In China, the authorities required junk food companies decreasing the amount of sugar in their soft drinks and applied higher tax level for those companies who do not want to follow this policy. Secondly, healthy lifestyle needs to be promoted by traditional and technological media. Telecomunity companies should create more programs which can show their audience the benefits of playing sports and what is the importance of having a good health.
In conclusion, after identifying the causes, there are several solutions available which can be taken to solve this problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 685, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... television rather than playing sports. Therefore this passive lifestyle is one of the mo...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10380622837 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53752385417 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60553633218 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2538896392 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.357142857 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287729116368 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920534385645 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478657571043 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173120335679 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270375236425 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.