In some countries, small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?
With the drastically economic development, the changing of sales methods and sizes leads to many controversial issues in the modern world. Nowadays, people tend driving to the out-of-town mega supermarket making the small town-center shops go out of business. Consequently, people without cars meet the difficulty in accessing to out-of-town stores, and it may increase the car population in the near future. In my opinion, the disadvantages are more worth to consider than the benefits.
In some perspectives, the changing of business method can brings back a few advantages. As we all know, small shop is absolutely going to obsolete in the near future and the disappearance of these shops can make the management of the government much more easier when the government just have to control specific mega shopping center. The saving budget from managing the detached shops can be transferred into the transportation expense to upgrade the transport systems. The lower proportion of center shops also motivates people purchasing cars which definitely merges the total economic growth.
However, I think that the negative effects that the changing created are more remarkable. In some third-world countries or developing countries, a car is an unaffordable transportation with major civilians. For example, in Vietnam, purchasing personal car is a luxurious thing for only high class. If the extinction of small center shops comes true, most of Vietnam’s citizens cannot access the rural large shopping center to buy merchandise. Although considering developed countries, this changing still leads to many drawbacks. For instance, the more residents drive cars, the more regular traffic congestions happen.
To conclude, the fact that small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores can bring out more drawbacks than the advantages. I highly recommend that the government should remain the existence of center shops until fully developing the transport system and the economics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: bring
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shops'' or 'shop's'?
Suggestion: shops'; shop's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the transport system and the economics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, third, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55910543131 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04921573928 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581469648562 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2802683737 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.75 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5625 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420735492013 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121091984946 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16211196984 0.0667982634062 243% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270866391423 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150055692225 0.056905535591 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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