In some countries young people are enouraged to work or travel for a year between finishinf highschool and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.
Although some people believe that a gap year between secondary school and university is beneficial, others think that this educational delay could be detrimental on the long run. Travelling and work provides young adults with a multi-dimensional learning experiance and enables them to discover their career interests, but this educational gap has some drawbacks to be taken into account.
A gap year after high school can be advantageous in multiple ways, especially if one decides to acquire work experience. One benefit of getting a job is, that it helps the individual learn about the employer and employee relationship. These interactions not only enhance communication skills, but also help develop other interpersonal skills. Moreover, children learn how to maintain a work life balance. For instance, students doing summer internships learn to balance their work along with other activities in their vacations. Alternatively, many youngsters choose to travel around the world before they begin their university education. This enables them to learn about career prospects abroad and discover themselves as independent individuals. Exploring and discovering their capabilities before beginning a degree education enables students to make better decisions about their career choices and molds them into responsible adults.
One problem with an educational break is the lag of a year on one's CV. Employers prefer hiring individuals with good grades and minimum educational gaps, a voluntary break may give the wrong impression of lack of one's interest in education. Another issue may arise with youngsters earning money at a young age, this makes them lose motivation to study further as a consequence of which a large number of youngsters may end up with out a graduate degree. Moreover, those who choose to travel are vulnerable to fall victim to criminal activities and can be easily convinced for crimes such as, drug trafficking and are hence under a constant security threat.
In conclusion, an educational gap year between school and university may be a fruitful learning experience for some, but it does carry a simultaneous security risks to one's life and future.
Comments
Yes, I think 8.5 out of 9 is
Yes, I think 8.5 out of 9 is a fair score for this essay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45722713864 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02319156909 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601769911504 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1311170916 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.333333333 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187060379646 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584020675295 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514344372037 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123273409582 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452003297229 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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