Nowadays, teenagers are having a longer life and better health than before thanks to developments in medical technology and health care systems, among many other factors. Although the youth may benefit from this, it is widely believed that they are not necessarily happier despite all the material possessions that they have. In this essay, I would argue that there is one principal reason and propose some solutions to tackle this situation.
To begin with, the influence of commercial advertising is at the root of the dissatisfaction of today's youngsters. Indeed, the advertisements presented on websites or social networking sites can come in various forms including infographics and animated videos that enhance the curiosity and attraction of the products provided. Teenagers are swayed by advertisements to possess more and more things which, they are told, will bring them happiness, such as toys, a McDonald's burger, or the latest fashions. However, all this personal consumption has failed to bring happiness, and the false promises have resulted in disillusionment among young people.
To address the underlying causes, I would propose two solutions. Firstly, governments must introduce restrictions on advertising, and it would be even more effective to impose a complete ban on all marketing. For example, some countries such as the United States and Australia have already taken steps to ban cigarette ads from television and radio, this would effectively block the potential bad influences from online networking sites. Secondly, national and local authorities should allocate resources to schools to provide opportunities for young people to participate actively in sports or to take up a musical instrument. This will bring much more happiness and social interactions into the lives of today's youth, rather than being passive individual consumers of everything.
In conclusion, by taking resolute actions to curb the activities of the marketing industry, governments could help young people to develop into happier citizens of the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58280254777 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01695917759 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646496815287 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6273976689 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.846153846 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184550705569 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556827335957 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327887603721 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0965832165716 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398301001356 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.31 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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