In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Common sense seems to claim that the more efforts young people put in their study or work, the more achievements they could record. The benefits of the attempt in children are varied, and its drawbacks are no less noticeable.
It is undeniable that the considerable encouragement and support to children has enormous advantages. First of all, children are willing to deserve some good traits such as desirable, studious, or diligent. When kids are encouraged to try, they will keep working and overcome the difficulties. The discipline and principles are formed in their mindset also. This make children tend to try their best instead of giving up the work. Moreover, teenagers who work under their own principles seem to be more successful than those who do not. Their hard work would probably pay off. Taking everything into account, encouraging children to strive for their dream or achievements help them to develop the characteristic of successful people.
Despite obvious benefits of the risen in children’s inspiration and motivation, its downsides seem to be more outstanding. It is the fact that attempt is not the only factor contribute in the achievement of a person. For example, my brother wanted to join in the Security Academy, which is one of the most difficult university to enter in Viet Nam. They have many strict principles and the new student target is limited. My brother tried so hard to be one of its student though he still failed the physical test due to the height required standard. in the same way, there are many people miss their chances because of the lack of luck. With this in mind, although attempt is considered as the most important aspect for successful, there are many factors participate in how it works also.
In conclusion, the message is having both merits and drawbacks. Therefore, I believe that people should encourage their kids to try their best in order to gain the good potrait and have the more chances to be successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99697885196 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7746806472 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580060422961 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9063137523 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0526315789 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177618488236 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543049949786 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438912022804 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102433059513 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465349143246 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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