In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
While I’ve grown up, my parents often had said to me, ‘You can fulfill whatever you do if you do your best.’ This message had aroused me to try more when I was about to give up something. Having said that, It is true that this cheering mention could even give a burden to children.
First, this message has a big impact on children, especially when they are depressed. They would feel the inability from what they’d try to succeed. At that moment, if some parents said to their child, ‘Don’t give up! You can achieve anything if you try hard enough.’, this child may get will to try one more time. When they really achieved the goal that they wanted to reach, then they would get confidence. The more these experiences accumulate to them, the more they can overcome their fear. Therefore, children can build up the power of challenge.
On the contrary, this message can arouse counter-effect. When parents let the children in the field where they’re not only talented enough but also they don’t have interest, then children would lose their confidence. In childhood, rewarding is as important as challenging. Thus, it would be better to focus on the part in which they’re talented.
In education, every expert says that encouragement is so important to children. It could work on children who give up something easily. Sometimes, they should fight and they have to push their opinion when they think they’re totally right. Meanwhile, this encouragement must not be too demanding to them too much. Especially, children could feel too much pressure when they have to compete with someone. Children should learn when they give up or how to accept their loss. We can’t always get what we want, even if we try enough.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, it is true, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87878787879 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58345058336 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0024237493 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2631578947 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6315789474 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453479798234 0.244688304435 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139353383721 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676754589788 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281747393069 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101897130109 0.056905535591 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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