Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many parents are concerned about how they educate their children. On the one hand, some people consider that adults should emphasize the importance of gaining a victory, while others reckon that parents should teach children cooperating as a group member is important rather than encouraging a competitive mind. This essay will discuss both perspectives and it will explain why parents should focus on balance not to lean one side.
First of all, when parents cheer and support children who want to develop their aptitude or interest, children get confident. This is because their encouragement helps them not to give up, but to endure more. However, it is true that it could enhance the violent characteristics of children when it comes to playing games or doing sports.
Because of the above drawback, it is crucial that parents should teach children the importance of socializing, due to the fact that it grows the leadership of children. By learning how to make a harmonization, they build up a sense of responsibility. There is no question that they need to be competitive as an individual person in some scenarios, but it is clear that the wise leader doesn't always pursue their own opinion.
To sum up, encouraging both sides of a sense of competition and cooperation with team members is vital to children. To compete with others, they would learn the value of efforts to obtain victory. Nonetheless, children should not miss the importance of teamwork, because a lot of big projects can't succeed alone.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 385, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s, but it is clear that the wise leader doesnt always pursue their own opinion. To ...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 294, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...teamwork, because a lot of big projects cant succeed alone.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, nonetheless, so, while, first of all, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05976095618 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85713208632 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597609561753 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4890451546 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.833333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301848017352 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973880383088 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579812179999 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171583104551 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280447293605 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 385, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s, but it is clear that the wise leader doesnt always pursue their own opinion. To ...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 294, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...teamwork, because a lot of big projects cant succeed alone.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, nonetheless, so, while, first of all, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05976095618 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85713208632 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597609561753 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4890451546 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.833333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301848017352 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973880383088 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579812179999 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171583104551 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280447293605 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.