In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In several cultures, kids are usually taught to put a great deal of effort to get any achievements. In my opinion, this belief appears to have two sides benefits and drawbacks in particular circumstances.
To begin with, I believe that the thought is beneficial to children for some reasons. First, it can act as an encouragement for kids to become less reliant on other people for what they want as they know. Trying hard themselves is likely to help them become independent people which will be beneficial for them in the future. In addition, keep their best performance for their targets plays an important role in boosting their mental strength which will have positive effects on their career as they do not give up easily. For example, those who want to work as athletes may not feel frustrated under a high-pressure environment if they were well-prepared with willpower at an early age.
Nevertheless, I strongly argue that the lesson also has its downsides. Being told to try hard on everything, kids may hurt themselves when putting excessive effort beyond their limit. For instance, those who want to experience extreme sports can put themselves in danger if they try too hard regardless of the fact that they are not fit enough. Moreover, kids may undergo negative feelings if they try their best but do not succeed. Failing may lead to a sense of blaming themselves and even isolation, which can affect negatively for their health.
In conclusion, although teaching kids to try hard on everything to get great achievements is advantageous for them in long term, I believe that the belief also has disadvantageous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97435897436 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89509869012 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593406593407 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5435053358 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.461538462 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2307692308 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221840621717 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744689659634 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581893517937 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113405293718 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058606003225 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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