In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Most of the time, some nations advise their offspring that achieving everything is the direct result of working hard. Children become competitive and patient from receiving this message, but there are also drawbacks to be taken into account.
Firstly, one benefit of children motivating to be industrious is that they become determined to compete with their peers. Once offspring find diligence as a value, they tend to compete with others in different situations. Take school curriculum in which children will perform better, for example. Secondly, hearing this opinion that working hard is a need for reaching goals causes children to have patience. Confronting with obstacles in their lives, the patient children consider them steps towards success and do not accept the failure easily. This admirable attitude could positively affect children’s personal and social life.
On the other hand, when children get a strong belief that everything is accessible by consistent working, they may sacrifice their physical health to achieve their objectives. Children may make ambitious goals and set unreal plans which are out of their capability and harm their physical health. For instance, some children who want to be a sports star may injure themselves by doing strenuous exercises. Another possible issue is that unstoppable trying for getting purposes could also damage children’s mental health. They possibly prioritize achieving their goals above the other valuable things such as their family and friends. It seems that ignoring the relationships and friendships would make them isolated and puts their mental well-being in jeopardy.
In conclusion, while encouraging children to work hard to achieve their objectives can benefit them, it can also lead to some potential physical and mental risks to their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a sport' or simply 'sports'?
Suggestion: a sport; sports
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54642857143 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67261003286 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610714285714 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.7867297162 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.533333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245480128941 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894445335838 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385400877208 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163115124901 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252793660737 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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