In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Living in an era full of competition, parents often expect their children to be prodigy and keep telling their kids that they can reach their dreams if they try their best. In my opinion, this kind of encouragement can be a double-edged sword because it would push the kids to go beyond their limits but also causing disappointment in case of failure.
On the one hand, the first beneficial impact of this motivation would be helping children exceed their potential. Along with the encouragement from their parents, kids nowadays often come into contact with comics and movies that tend to use a motif of an ordinary character who overcomes many obstacles and finally becomes a hero. In this regard, these youngsters would feel inspired and attempt to imitate their favorite characters, then eventually break through their parents’ expectations or even their own ones. An illustration of this point would be me, who tried extremely hard to study physics and ended up receiving the first prize for secondary high schoolers in my hometown. I believe that I would not have made it without my parents’ encouragement.
On the other hand, a severe drawback of this practice is depression when failing. Kids are often full of hope about their future so that they would fight for it with all they have. However, in case they stumbled upon a hindrance and could not escape from it, then they would see themselves as a failure. Furthermore, this belief would stay with the kids as long as they do not accept the situation to move on, and the feeling of misery would drown and prevent them from trying again. Despite this, parents should be responsible for encouraging the kids when ups and downs.
To sum up, telling children to pursue their dreams with all their effort would help them surpass their limit, even though they would feel anxious when they could not make the task done. I firmly believe that parents should be with their kids to overcome these situations.
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also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, kind of, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87164179104 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56138537364 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561194029851 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9048646361 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.571428571 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165940077553 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668995661511 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525668230825 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120706253228 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377231030877 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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