Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Looking from an educational perspective, some claim that subjects related to art skills, such as music or craft should be included in school programme as these subjects are believed to bring certain benefits to students performance. Personally, while I hold a belief that art subjects can be beneficial to students performance, it is unnecessary to make these school subjects mandatory for all students.
For a variety of reasons, it would be unjustifiable to force all students to learn art in their study at school. The main reason for this argument is that students deserve the right to choose their own subjects as their innate talents vary from each other. This means that one can be gifted with art talent whereas others show a remarkable performance in science subjects. Hence, making all students learn art at school can bring a sense of reluctance, especially those who detest art, resulting in poor performance. Take a number of secondary school in Vietnam as an example. Some Vietnamese students, who show very little interest in art, often perform poorly in class during art session as they might have a notion that art seems to be tedious for them. As a result, these students may get distracted during art classes and receive dreadful results at the end of the school year.
Apart from the abovementioned practical concerns, learning art at school can somehow lead to an improvement for students. To explain, in some countries, school programmes are often heavy as students are required to learn various subjects, ranging from science to social aspects. Therefore, spending the entire school day focusing on academic knowledge can stress them out, leading to unproductive outcome as high levels of stress are scientifically proven to be harmful for brain health. In other words, learning art subjects, such as music, can be a great opportunity for students to release their pressure, recharging their energy so that they can be more efficient afterwards. For instance, some Vietnamese pupils find art sessions a good time for them to be creative and have fun while learning some useful skills, especially after a hetic day with a lot of main subjects. Therefore, in certain Vietnamese schools, students are provided art classes after science subjects in order to help release tension after a class.
Taking everything into consideration, this reinforces my perspective that young students should be given a chance to choose whether they can learn art subjects, which can help improve students’ academic results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
... brain health. In other words, learning art subjects, such as music, can be a great...
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Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
...chance to choose whether they can learn art subjects, which can help improve studen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, apart from, for instance, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20782396088 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81224827904 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528117359413 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.959098532 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.125 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5625 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296038939416 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114082454521 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635636011614 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209980402362 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507788560952 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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