It should be more expensive to make sugary products less appealing to consumers in order to encourage them to consume less. Many manufactured foods and drinks contain high levels of sugar, which can cause many health problems.
Do you agree or disagree?
In contemporary society, it is generally believed that certain products that contain high level of sugar should be tagged with higher prices as a way to discourage consumers from consuming sugary foods and drinks. Moreover, the main root of various medical issues is the excessive amount of sugar in processed foods and drinks. Personally, while I hold a firm belief that sugar is the main cause of several diseases, it is unjustifiable to push the price of sugary products.
For a variety of reasons, sugar can be blamed the main culprit leading to a number of illnesses. To begin with, in modern era, heaps of edible products are pre-cooked with a large addition of sugar. Once an individual consumes these products, sugar levels in their body will witness a surge, stimulating their appetite and induce a desire for more food consumption. Consequently, those who choose to eat more may have to experience obesity. Another note-worthy point is that a vast number of beverages, which comprises a significant quantity of sugar, is scientifically proven the primary cause of diabetes. This is because consuming sweetened drinks for a prolonged period of time can lead to insulin tolerance, raising the blood sugar levels and resulting in higher risk of diabetes.
Apart from the abovementioned practical concerns, it is unnecessary to boost the price tags of sweetened products. First, despite the fact that consuming sugary products excessively can bring some detrimental impacts, these sugary products, such as soft drinks, are considered basic necessities. Therefore, making these products exorbitant will affect the consumptions of these products, pressuring its revenue. Hence, such circumstance will create a drop in economic growth, raising the rate of unemployment as companies which specialise in sugary foods and drinks production may have to cut down their workforce.
Taking everything into consideration, it is clear that while raising the cost of sugary products may provide some short-term benefit, a long-run economic deterioration may follow. Thus, I strongly oppose the approach of incurring higher costs on sugar heavy contents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: period
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42261904762 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97671423963 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9316769867 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.466666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24376991123 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751341577616 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601627925992 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139068791659 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649874340117 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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