Music plays great importance in relaxing and entertainment. With people who do not have a beautiful voice, they tend to play some musical instruments. Some people say that children should be taught how to play a musical instrument. In my point of view, I agree with this statement because of the benefits bringing to every child.
On the one hand, musical instruments give artists a variety of advantages. Initially, playing any kind of musical instrument like guitar or piano will help them grow comprehensively. Our children are able to contain new knowledge about music, moreover, it also makes their brains develop fastly like the way our mothers let us listen to music when we were in their stomachs. Secondly, after hard studying, they need to relax or entertain, and music is the best way to blow off some steams and escape from playing video games. Finally, the ability to play a musical instrument is seen as a talent, and it will help them become a confident person. For example, in camping, if there is a man who can play guitar, the atmosphere will be more excited and his friends will look at him in a different way which admires him.
On the other hand, playing a musical instrument contain a drawback. Children will not have enough time to study and do homework. In addition, they tend to be anti-social and only focus on playing instruments. Due to ending too much time on saxophone or cello, children can even lead to autism when they grow up.
In conclusion, despite there are a few advantages, I still think that every child should be taught how to play an instrument, they make them develop comprehensively and become a talented person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...xcited and his friends will look at him in a different way which admires him. On the other hand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80487804878 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73567762388 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588850174216 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4514216746 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9333333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339029786447 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125218416155 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11122573562 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229866748888 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110842736534 0.056905535591 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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