Some educators believed that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that teaching children to play a musical instrument is necessary. Personally, I utterly agree that equipping this musical skill for the youngsters would be a great choice.
Firstly, knowing to play a musical instrument helps kids enhance their imagination. Specifically, music will stimulate the right amygdala, which is the main part responsible for emotional interpretation, to boost their creativity. Consequently, the learner would be significantly clever. For instance, a kid who has the ability to play piano,guitar,flute,etc. will perform more creatively in all activities at school than their peers who have not.
Secondly, playing musical instruments helps children make friends more easily. With a growing number of music bands, nowadays, adolescents could take part in one or even found one. Hence, they will have the opportunities to meet friends who share the same interest, playing instruments, and other aspects of their daily life.This not only improves their social network but also reduces the rate of depression in young ages owing to having no one to communicate with.
Last but not least, spending time learning this new skill will diminish the time, mostly, children have their eyes glued to the screen. Obviously, learning to play an instrument would never be easy, especially a new one, so the youngsters need to take their time and practice day by day to master this skill. Beside that, parents can even curb their kid's online time by using this method, showing them how to spend leisure time more efficiently.
To sum up, I strongly believe that musical instruments should be widely taught for the kids so as to develop themselves more rounded.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00355527788 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625925925926 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1564868952 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.571428571 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178758387708 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766684099619 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707333718918 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128184205335 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710107925524 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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