Some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence in TV, video games, and other types of entertainment for children’s leisure. How does this affect children? How do you think this problem can be tackled?
In contemporary era every individual is wishing to get mobile phones or other electronic gadgets in very young age to play and watch different fighting, shooting games and programs as well as movies. This situation have created a bugbear for parents due to increase figure of violence of free time fun activities. This essay will discuss how it puts unfavorable impacts on the children along with corrective measures; followed by a reasoned conclusion.
It is worth considering, that children nowadays are more into electronic entertainment and, they have tremendous opportunities and easy access to free games and movies through internet. This have changed the mentality of an adolescent because they start watching crimes movies and fire shooting games with immature brain which make them more violence because they are more attached with such violated activates, these programs indirectly install violation in their brains. For instance, games like pub g which are more famous around the globe which is played by every teenager where they learn shooting the opponent for the sake of benefits. Moreover, when kids are unable to do hard tasks so, they start thinking violently to achieve that goals.
Coming to the solution part, I think parents should strictly take the responsibility of their kids and they should have check and balance on their off springs that in which types of activities they are involved. Furthermore, they should focus on outdoor activities like football, cricket basketball and etc rather than indoor. They will be both physically and mentally active as well as they will learn leader ship and communication skills, will meet new friends and they will be get sense to tackling harsh tasks.
In conclusion, we cannot stop our young ones from the internet nor they will accept that they should be kept from online activities but we can overcome up to some extent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... games and movies through internet. This have changed the mentality of an adolesc...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to shoot'.
Suggestion: to shoot
...ayed by every teenager where they learn shooting the opponent for the sake of benefits. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16938110749 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63878229929 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625407166124 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.892692164 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.272727273 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9090909091 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161553760414 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637202415367 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439014370562 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0971720197064 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592159361706 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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