Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with what are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys

Essay topics:

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.
what are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys.

A large number of playing equipments are being purchased by the parants for their children to play with. Having lots of toys to the children has some advantages, although there are some drawbacks.
On the one hand, most of the childrens like to play with different toys. Playing with toys help childrens to develop their brain, if those are educatinal toys. Therefore, buying large amount of educational toys results learning and improving children`s knowledges. Moreover, babies are always willing to play with new toys. They feel bore to play with same playing equipment for many days. What`s more, it is evident that most of the childrens are passing their time by watching rhyms on mobile or computer, which makes them lazy and puts stress on their eyes. Consiquently, they suffer on visual problem on the very early age of their life. For that, Playing with large amount of toys are far better than watching mobile or playing in computer.
On the Other hand, parants purchase many toys for their children, because they wants to keep them busy with these. As a result, there is no interection between gurdian and children, which will create several problem on child`s social and family life. Generally, Children learn from two places, family and school. Wherease, Parants are the main source of learning basic things, such as decipline, behavior, religion etc. Buying large number of playing equipments for the childrens keep them busy with the toys, resulting very little interaction with family members. For that reason, they are not able to learn decepline, behavior or culture, which makes them introvert and stubborn.
In conclusion, Purchasing many educational toys for kids are good for their brain development and learning, while less family interection could be the drawback.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
A large number of playing equipments are being purchased ...
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Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'want'
Suggestion: want
...y toys for their children, because they wants to keep them busy with these. As a resu...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mily interection could be the drawback.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21649484536 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59566438071 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546391752577 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3527855583 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2941176471 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1176470588 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437649678098 0.244688304435 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146664925832 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106487248462 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294935605953 0.151304729494 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134303709338 0.056905535591 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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