Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes Other people believe that it is important

People have different view about the importance of allowing children to create their own determines for daily problems. While some argue that it could be selfishness in the future but I still believe that it is better for them to make decisions by themselves.
There are various reasons why people believe that this view will be not good for children. Firstly, children could only think about their own wishes. As a result, the relationships around them could be broken because of their selfishness. Secondly, they also will can be a thief in the future if they do not have enough the attention from their adults. For example, there were a number of children roped money from other people in order to buying just a toy which they cannot have enough cash for. Finally, the allowing could decrease the attention of children for other people such as their parents, brother or sister just because of some disagreements.
In spite of these arguments, I believe that children should be allowed for their most choices. In my opinion, the knowledge and experience will benefit more if children are free to make their own choices. For instance, through solving a problem such as daily food or clothes, children can have several independent habit. Additionally, their intelligent will increase day by day thanks to facing to everyday matters. In fact, in research, scientist published that children who have to be independent with their decisions had more IQ indexes than others.
In conclusion, although it might seem dangerous for allowing children to make their decisions but I still believe that it can be great for them if they have enough attention from their family or adults.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 164, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding relationships'?
Suggestion: the surrounding relationships
...nk about their own wishes. As a result, the relationships around them could be broken because of their selfis...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tention from their family or adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01785714286 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61637065573 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3211870067 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.357142857 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334684255109 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1364507322 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750437979567 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226162842438 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044049287661 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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