Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes Other people believe that it is important

Many people assume that giving children the ability to decide family everyday choices will result in them only think about their desire, while some believe that giving youngsters to decide base on their problems will improve their lives. In my opinion, I completely agree that we should give the youth the power to decide because it will teach them to be independent in the future.
People think that letting children decide every day choices might turn them into a selfish person in the future since they base their choice on emotion. This is because children are impressionabled and can easily be influenced by things that interest them, which they might choose food, clothes and entertainment base on their intuition instead of logic. As a result, their choice will only satisfy their needs without thinking of other people, which can turn them into a person with only their desire and needs in mind. For example, children products are mostly very appealing and colorful so that they can attract youngsters, which compels them to ask their parents to buy it for them.
However, I would argue that giving youngsters the ability to decide will benefit them in their adulthood because it will teach them to be independent in their choices. Many adults today are gradually allowing their offsprings have their own opinion and decision around the house, this could help them decide better on how to solve a particular problem base on their circumstances, which result them being a responsible citizens of society, and their decision will benefit themselves and everyone around them. For instance, there are research that giving children the ability to decide has helped them being more independent and mature in their adulthood.
In conclusion, although giving the youth ability to decide on every choice might result in them being a selfish person because of their emotion, I would argue that it will be more beneficial for children to decide on a certain matter so that they can learn to be more independent in their choices.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'citizen'?
Suggestion: citizen
..., which result them being a responsible citizens of society, and their decision will ben...
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Line 3, column 601, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be' or 'be'.
Suggestion: to be; be
...n the ability to decide has helped them being more independent and mature in their ad...
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Line 4, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o be more independent in their choices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02670623145 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45372425267 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456973293769 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1230373985 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.4 106.682146367 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249316788851 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121526458446 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811250060784 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167216592666 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494794843639 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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