some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is import

Essay topics:

some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

In the given statement, two contrast perception about the children is given by several people. According to some people, allowing the children to make their own choice is important. While, some people are against this choice. Because, they think that it may lead children towards society of individual.

First, allowing children for making their own choice is a righteous decision according to bunch of people. Because, they feel that setting their child free to make decision is going to improve various skills. Children can become independent by making their own choices regularly without others help. Moreover, the decision making skills can also be developed by the process of making their own decision. It makes children smarter and competitive. While, from the other people's perspective it is not that important for children to make their own choice on everyday matters. The reason behind this would be their conservative thinking approach. That if they allow children to make their own decisions it may lead children towards selfish individuals. Because of that the children might become more selfish and individual who only think about their own benefits. And the children might lost the track and make some unnecessary choices which is harmful for others. For instance, to get something by taking someone down or maybe worse than this. So these are the both thinking approach of different people.

However, I believe that allowing children to make their own choice is smart decision. Because, the world is too competitive. So that, children must need to be smart enough to take several decisions when it is needed. For this purpose we need to keep children free from their choice and let them make own choice for them. If, we don't do that then children would becomes reliable on others. For example, let just talk about general tasks of children on everyday basis like selecting cloth to wear, selection of entertainment source etc. Ask yourself "Is that okay to relay on someone to choose the entertainment medium?" You must be capable of choosing your priorities.

I would say that we must allow our children for making their own choices so that they can develop variety of skills and compete with the outer world. Although some people are against this because of the insecurity about children's future decisions. But at this is not necessary for our children. We should set them free and let them explore their own world.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... to make their own choice is important. While, some people are against this choice. B...
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...e, some people are against this choice. Because, they think that it may lead children t...
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... decision according to bunch of people. Because, they feel that setting their child fre...
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... and competitive. While, from the other peoples perspective it is not that important fo...
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...ake their own choice is smart decision. Because, the world is too competitive. So that,...
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..., the world is too competitive. So that, children must need to be smart enough to...
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... and let them make own choice for them. If, we dont do that then children would be...
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...e and let them explore their own world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09950248756 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52748560051 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482587064677 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9113000563 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9259259259 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8888888889 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25925925926 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434273683243 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133363559388 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105399314034 0.0667982634062 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278753236103 0.151304729494 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692718318337 0.056905535591 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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