Some people believe that the best way to encourage children that have a healthy diet at school and some people believe that parents should teach them to have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Hitherto, globalization has led to some disparity in credo of feeding children, and the question of whether ready-made diet from parents can is better than those provided by schools or not has been raising public attention. While some people lament that children must follow parents’ tutelage, I gravitate toward to the opposite by giving some rational evidence.
It is perceptible that every school have their own food experts who have ability to make a diet route for kids. These people have reliable academic knowledge so that they can make children become healthier by combining rational foods together. Furthermore, the centralization of children not only can helps to share work with their parents, but also provide children a chance to exchange knowledge with the others. May be a minority of resident believe that aliments in school is not reliable, but in this day and age, governments in every nations enact rules about food conservation and school must follow it. A vivid example is that in VN, most of resident send their kids to kindergarten in the early-day, so that they do not have to worry about supplying diets to children and they will have more time to concentrate on working.
On the other hand, ready-made diet do not bring much advantages to children but drawbacks. Adults feed their kids by basing on traditional method, which can be out of date in this modern era. What is more, this kind of feeding can deters children from being independent and creates some bad aftermaths for their personal characteristics in the latter-life.
In conclusion, instead of isolating kids from schools, parent should do the opposite, this will make children reach the pinnacle of development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...arity in credo of feeding children, and the question of whether ready-made diet from parents can is bet...
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Line 2, column 301, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...centralization of children not only can helps to share work with their parents, but a...
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Line 2, column 419, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...exchange knowledge with the others. May be a minority of resident believe that ali...
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Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ther hand, ready-made diet do not bring much advantages to children but drawbacks. A...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'deter'
Suggestion: deter
... What is more, this kind of feeding can deters children from being independent and cre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, kind of, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79832311303 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6626814576 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.818181818 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243395132125 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091600793285 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551136680995 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134874214037 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711875725153 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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