Some people believe that for children learning about the local history is more important than knowing the World history. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? (61)

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Some people believe that for children learning about the local history is more important than knowing the World history. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? (61)

As history could repeat during the years, knowing about it could be crucial issue. Especially for children which are considered as our next generation in society. Although studying history of own country is important matter, sometimes being curious about the past events all around the world could be more vital. So children must be taught distinct kind of this field.
History of each society is its asset. Being aware about your ancestors and their behavior in different situation give you the chance to make better decision in future. Furthermore, don’t do the same mistake in political, social situation. Even if you will be a normal citizen. Moreover, if youth read about adventure of people in the past, they would be more sensible about worth things that they have now and are provided for them like freedom.
As culture and history are not separated concept so knowing about world history make you familiar with verity cultures and different kind of people. For children in school it could be a motivation to follow in future at university as course study. Also history has lots of subdivided in different science so it could be effective in selecting an occupation in future.
In conclusion, learning history youngster in both side of interior or exterior of country, either near or far past, let them know different aspects of success and failure of politician, scientists and artists during the history and encourage them to be successful likewise their ancestors.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ety is its asset. Being aware about your ancestors and their behavior in differen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, so, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1978021978 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74869862539 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608058608059 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7771733638 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232751891489 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068838524888 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446984438533 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139644746148 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451993746765 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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