Some people believe that children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe that children should be free to do what they want to do in their free time. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that when boys and girls are involved in different activities and games they learn and enjoy themselves at the same time. While few think that, students should do more organized activities, others argue that they should be left at their will to enjoy their leisure time. I do not completely agree with both views and will explain using appropriate examples.
On the one hand, children are usually guided to take part in well-planned activities. This is because, they should be motivated to value time and become punctual, which would lead them to a path of success. The students who participate in such efficient activities indulge in self- discipline and mental control, which improve their overall performance and nature. For example, in my opinion, I used to go regularly for tennis practice’s that led to an improvement in my concentration and ability to work fast. In contrast, continuously performing the same routine leads to boredom. As a result, children tend to lose interest and avoid doing it in future.
On the other hand, when learners have an opportunity to do whatever they want in their free time it gives them happiness and a sense of autonomy. The reason is, that their creative side is given an opportunity, which helps them to make the right choices in the life ahead. They have an option to try varied skills like painting, swimming, pottery making, which in turn could even become their career in future. For instance, a study done by the United Kingdom’s news channel concluded that those scholars who were left to enjoy their free time according to their wish had more confidence and creativity. However, young beginners need constant guidance and support to be oriented towards essential activities.
In conclusion, while, organized activities play a significant role in neuro-cognitive development of child, I believe activities of one’s own choice add a zeal and spark to the monotony of life. They both are equally important for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09726443769 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85849091912 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620060790274 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6949572549 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.8125 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387145883668 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103188585777 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084201795499 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206539368817 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727359952442 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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