Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

While some people propose crime is the person having bad characteristics, I would agree with those who think poverty and hostile situations bring many people into crime.

On the one hand, there are 2 reasons why many people label that crime is the person who has bad personalities. Firstly, we perceive information about criminal activities through TV, newspaper or social media, which are caused by killers, thefts, illegal organizations... whose has the same point is a black background. All of them are lazy, aimless and low-educated people. we spend a lot of time and put much effort into studying and practicing toward a bright future with a dream job and settle living. However, crimes, they just want to get money easily, fast without effort, so instead of doing things like us, they choose doing illegal jobs. Secondly, bullying is a noticeable characteristic of many crimes. Therefore, it is reasonable if people agree that bullies may have a higher rate of crime-rate than others.

On the other hand, I strongly believe that situation conditions have a certain impact on the criminal activities of individuals. In many developing countries, especially in remote areas, poor economy leads to a high rate of unemployment. A vast of manual labor can not get a job to guarantee their life so many people do wrong things such as stealing, bullying, joining in crime organizations. For example, in Africa - one of the poorest areas in the world, international crime organizations use local people to transfer drugs and fake money. These native people have no choice except undertaking those jobs to earn money in order to bring up their family.

In conclusion, bad personalities may be elements lead people to do illegal activities, I strongly believe that situation conditions are a noticeable reason lead to it.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... lazy, aimless and low-educated people. we spend a lot of time and put much effort...
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Line 7, column 628, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to do'.
Suggestion: to do
...ad of doing things like us, they choose doing illegal jobs. Secondly, bullying is a n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17785234899 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96327864814 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644295302013 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2483115096 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.866666667 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177826406098 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549578648094 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665143111937 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127746562154 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604601710776 0.056905535591 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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