Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion?.

The culture is one of the most importantly mental values of each country all over the world, therefore, how to protect it is the question that per nation need to answers on their own. While many people believe that culture will be deteriorated by the commercial activities of the tourism industry, I personally think that tourism makes significant contributions to preserving it.
On the one hand, numbers of people concern that cultural value will be eroded if they are used for making money. The reason for this is that exhibits seem to be ruined more easily by human’s impacts. For example, 100-year-old statues displayed in museum may be much touched and physically effected by a number of visitor flocks, which could make them destroyed gradually. Furthermore, many tourism companies, today, pay more attention to building luxury and new buildings such as a range of modern resorts and sparkling hotel systems in order to attract more number of visitors. Therefore, tourists tent to turn their back with the paces of traditional values, which could make the culture less popular.
On the other hand, tourism sector is a great tool that the government can rely on to prevent their cultural values from deterioration. Firstly, enterprises in the tourism industry have enough necessary resources and abilities to maintain the original condition of heritages. It is obvious that national heritages need to be conserved properly by professionals. Secondly, tourism plays a vital role in advertising the cultural values of a country to not only local people but also overseas ones. Therefore, the culture would become more prevalent to many travelers.
In conclusion, although several individuals think that tourism should be responsible for the erosion of the culture, I argue that the cultural values could be sustained their initial condition and value by the tourism field.

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Average: 8.6 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'answer'.
Suggestion: answer
...is the question that per nation need to answers on their own. While many people believe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26910299003 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84441265041 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591362126246 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9674443461 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255403313664 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875462658281 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629651838037 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165774191177 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370782387193 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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