Some people believe that following children to make their own choice on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Following children to make their own choice on their needs was believed result individualism on their character, although some people believe that habit will help the children to be more independent. Some people believe that follow the kids to decide on their daily needs is believed result individualism on their character, although others believe that habit will help the children to be more strong independent. Some Children learn to make choice regarding their daily needs. They tend to let their child make their own decision easily without opinion from them, however this habit has a drawback if they cannot control the desire of their child, also their child will have selfish character. My essay will compare both views of this idea and also there is my idea how to balance this habit.
When the children have authority to make decision regarding their life especially daily needs, then it can stimulates them to be independent and grow up as individuals that have strong character because the children who are practiced to make decision right from childhood will often face directly with challenges. Furthermore, they know well their wish and goal in life and be attracted to be more successful than one who has no clear purpose of life. In 2018, Psychology department of Indonesia University found that 8 out of 10 kid who practice intensively to be independent have a high ambition in life.
This idea has a critical drawback. Kids who have these freedom are inclined opportunity of becoming selfish individualist. The research found that children who have this habit is careless with others, then it definitely impact their social life when they grow up as adult, and as social human people cannot force their own needs to others.
All in all, the kids absolutely should practice to choose their own needs in life, so they become independent people in the future, but the parents should control their behaviour and teach them to respect to other’s rights. Furthermore, When they grow up as a mature they have freedom to bravely make some decisions while also have good empathy to others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'stimulate'
Suggestion: stimulate
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this freedom' or 'these freedoms'?
Suggestion: this freedom; these freedoms
... has a critical drawback. Kids who have these freedom are inclined opportunity of becoming se...
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Message: Did you mean 'impacts'?
Suggestion: impacts
...areless with others, then it definitely impact their social life when they grow up as ...
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Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practice choosing'.
Suggestion: practice choosing
... All in all, the kids absolutely should practice to choose their own needs in life, so they become...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04571428571 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59669491658 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477142857143 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.8532529054 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.846153846 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9230769231 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317633455995 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131246684468 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13368899822 0.0667982634062 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187168849648 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110761911795 0.056905535591 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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