Some people believe that government should increase the number of sports facilities to improve public health while other believe this has little effect and we need other measures to improve it Discuss and give your opinion

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Some people believe that government should increase the number of sports facilities to improve public health, while other believe this has little effect and we need other measures to improve it. Discuss and give your opinion?

Nowadays, sports are really important and needful for public health. some people think that to improve is provide more facilities for sport. however, I would argue that this would not have so much impacts on public health and that other measures are required.

On one hand, some people who love to do sport will join with the right schedule and curriculum at facility to fill up the desire of doing exercise. Also, if people see more facilities at places they would exercise more frequent and even they will ask friends to do exercise with them, this may give people gain more motivations than say at negligent home or work. people working at office, for example, when they finish work they can go with their coworkers to do exercise with them or ask someone they know to go to the sport places, so they have more fun and they will make it schedule.

On the other hand, people who are “couch potato” do not care about this sports places. For those people, doing sport is something irrelevant to their lifestyle. some would claim that they are busy, others would just being lazy and enjoy food only and those will never want to do sport. Additionally, most of the facilities are expensive, people who love and enjoy doing sport, for instant, they are willing to do sport at home and learning from Youtube or apps for training to be healthy without any problems. Furthermore, citizens have to pay tax so it would be better if the government spend the tax to protect environment or another purpose.

In conclusion, public heath need to be improved, however, facilities are not essentially necessary. this would have a little effect on community but not the most important things to improve public health.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82094594595 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4479959119 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530405405405 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4618644058 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.769230769 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21000864863 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100547383185 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638217468542 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173290461071 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851962595319 0.056905535591 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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