Some people believe that a government's responsibility should provide care and financial support for people after they retire. Other said that people should help themselves. Do you agree or disagree, and what is your opinion?

The progress of a country depends on several factors, one of which is the priority of government expenditures towards proper fields. While for some science is considered to be more beneficial area to spend money on, I am of the opinion that is better to allocate equal amount of funds to both science and other subjects for the sake of a country.
It is true that science has been one of the most favorable reasons nowadays the world has reached its highest development rate. In other words, recent technology advancements and big innovations facilitating our lives in many ways are how we have benefited from studying science subjects. If humanity had not paid enough attention to improvement in technology and medicine -both are the examples of scientific areas- living standards of people would not have risen to such a high level in short period of time.
Apart from that, other subjects, such as art and sport should not be evaluated as poorly effective since they have undeniable impact on promoting a country. The world has seen many eminent sports-people and artists making some countries be recognized all over the world , which, in turn, has affected many other fields to develop in these counties. People’s keen desire towards these two areas are the main reasons of this trend.
To take a different aspect to support the idea that they should equally be evaluated, the improvement in one sphere naturally paves the way for another. To be more specific, the financial benefit obtained from technological development could be used to develop the area of art and other fields as everything in this world depends on money.
All in all, there are quite many reasons to root the argument that science subjects should be given priority while investing money. Both scientific and others subjects are crucial if given appropriate support by goverment.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ave risen to such a high level in short period of time. Apart from that, other subjects, such...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...untries be recognized all over the world , which, in turn, has affected many other...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, apart from, in short, such as, in other words, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02912621359 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71670364009 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572815533981 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.8376491798 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.5 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160321540366 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583240016688 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342303681967 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874438024588 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370209041089 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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