Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it could cause problems. Do you agree or disagree?
A world we know today would not be exist without laboring. It is the key to develop and maintain global modernization. And due to the huge demand from labor forces, some companies and organizations allow workers above 60 to keep working. But there is an opinion state that at this age, retirements are needed. From my point of view, I can’t share the same opinion with this. In this essay, I will explain why.
First, age is just a number. A true fact that the rate of work is based on the performance, not the age. 60-year-old men can still do the calculation properly, such as math professors. Moreover, older people tend to have more experience in their own field of job, so they know how to make it as efficient as possible. Also, their experience which they collect through the years can be passed through younger workers. Not only new workers be profitable from this, but also older ones can maintain their career at the company, therefore make a perfect balance. If a company knows the way to organize these two forces to work together, the advantages are uncountable.
One more benefit to keep the old labor force to stay is they can reduce the need for younger worker, hence save a lot of money both for the companies and the governments. A research has shown that for a single worker, the organizations and governments have to pay $169.000 per year for working insurances and other fees, and the amount of $200.000 is the basic requirement for a retired worker. Holding the old workers’ feet at the desk can save a sum of $31.000 per person. Multiplying this with the number of workers, we can imagine how enormous a single organization can save. Moreover, reducing the need of younger workers can control the birthrate of a country. From that, overpopulation can be stopped, and the burden for a country will be lowered.
In my opinion, the use of old workers is essential. From the benefits that have mentioned above, governments and organizations should encourage, and offer better conditions to their own employees.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
... for the companies and the governments. A research has shown that for a single worker, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78753541076 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77256800694 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57507082153 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0546153834 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4761904762 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0711948035671 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0239321200411 0.084324248473 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347648044009 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.043539661235 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414472972064 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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