Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It could be said that accepting a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is best. However, there is another opinion that trying to change and improving such conditions is better. In this essay, I will discuss both these views, but I argue that the latter idea is better for the following reason.
To begin with, people all over the world, including my country, Japan, are involved in serious situations where they have to work from early in the morning until late at night. Still they cannot get large salaries, which is only enough to live without luxury. The reason why they accept the situation is, I think, that they have to raise their family in their country. If they want to quit their jobs, they cannot afford to do so.
On the other hand, other people would try to break the unsatisfied situation, and in the lucky case, they would be able to get an improved position. For example, one of my best friends, Mr. Yamada, worked for a terrible company which made him work in the above condition. However, he consulted many people from his parents to friends, and his decision to change the job released him from the bad situation. He also move into the better place to live in and the new job gives him a larger/better salary and free time now.
In my opinion, through understanding the case of Mr. Ushijima, I firmly believe that the improvement from the worse situation absolutely makes people happier and more comfortable in their lives. In addition to this, if the case is improved and they can get more money and free time, it also prevents their family from feeling uneasy because they can spend enough time with their wife and children.
In conclusion, this essay has described two opinions of accepting a bad situation and of trying to change the situation with the reasons above, respectively. However, I definitely recommend the latter view not only for them but also for their family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77218934911 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48188704691 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556213017751 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6105485389 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.533333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266636137129 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946094676483 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104657457086 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165180632858 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162089128698 0.056905535591 285% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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