There are differing views on the issue of sharing scientific, business, and academic information. According to some, this information should be share freely among people and other researchers completely. The others believe that these data are worth too much which should not be share free. Some reasons for these opinions along with my view are intended to be discussed in this essay.
On the one hand, some information about business or some huge researches in astrology are not easy to gain which share them freely with others. Most countries by having such a great information about astrology or business want to show their power to other society. Also, they reach these data as a profitable source that can sell them to others for filling the budget of their government.For instance, Russia and USA try to keep their astrology knowledge in secret to become the first country in this issue.
On the other hand, some information should be shared freely to prevent our planet from dangerous. Nowadays many problems such as drought, Ozone depletion and air pollution are common for most societies. So many politicians and researchers should cooperate with each other for solving these problems. In this situation sharing information not only has a great effect on people's lives but also lead our planet toward better condition as geographical aspect.
By way of conclusion, I affirm my position that whilst it has some profit for some government and their researcher or businessman to do not share information with others, It's my belief that for proceeding our planet toward better condition, it's worthwhile to share information freely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shared'?
Suggestion: shared
...ing to some, this information should be share freely among people and other researche...
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Line 2, column 388, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
... filling the budget of their government.For instance, Russia and USA try to keep th...
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Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...o do not share information with others, Its my belief that for proceeding our plane...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16541353383 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72593463903 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0939622403 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378695550301 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152503393866 0.084324248473 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094919922502 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243318242647 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109410087891 0.056905535591 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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