While some folks think that contemporary layouts for schools and offices with more wide spaces are essential, i am totally in favour of this idea. This essay will discuss firstly the significant negative impacts on students and staffs. And secondly, the benefits of expanded extents with relevant examples.
To begin with, the considerable disturbance is one of the paramount disadvantages. A school would be a good example. If children are asked to memorise a certain topic in a classroom, there is a high probability that they will be unable to concentrate predominantly. Because the room is open, where there are no physical barriers, and students who are sitting very close to each other, the noise can readily cause serious distractions. Next, the invasion of privacy remains a great inconvenience of this type of architecture. For illustration, an individual must either leave an office and look for a nearby cafe or stop reading private emails in the office since each act of the person can be effortlessly witnessed by the peers.
On the other hand, i strongly believe that the advantages comfortably prevail the shortcomings. Primarily, achieving immediate goals is highly convenient. As working out in the open spaces allows to share concerns and ideas directly, not only would free spaces aid to communicate effectively but also the outline could grant pupils to provide and obtain a constructive feedback, which is clearly crucial in accomplishing objectives. On the second place, schools and offices can save big money. Evidently, the cost of floor space in most major cities is exorbitant. So having an open plan design, which means that without doors and walls, more staffs can be readily accommodated in a single room, subjecting to an affordable rent. This ascertains why open spaces are favourable and reasonable.
In conclusion, presumably, considering the efficient interpersonal communication and an economical arrangement, open spaces are extremely worthwhile for offices and schools.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the reasons are not exactly correct. for example, 'open spaces for schools' doesn't mean the rooms are open. but means the rooms are bigger or wider or with more rooms for activities.
so the disadvantages should be like:
more money to build, more energy to waste, more human resources for maintenance...
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Google 'open spaces for schools' or 'open spaces for offices' and see images, it will get the ideas for open spaces.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 316 350
No. of Characters: 1650 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.216 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.222 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.988 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.262 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.45 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.014 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...es with more wide spaces are essential, i am totally in favour of this idea. This...
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Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'sharing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: sharing
...s working out in the open spaces allows to share concerns and ideas directly, not only w...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ely worthwhile for offices and schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37974683544 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11035866689 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655063291139 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0031580468 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261345349026 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696090070422 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623251027909 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155475292131 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468677870993 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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