In many nations, females no longer sense the urge to tie a knot. Some folks think that women are not planning to wed as the majority are financially independent, and thus do not crave the monetary guarantee, which marriage can usually fetch. I support the given idea, but i also believe there are other factors that play a crucial role too. This essay will support my opinion with relevant examples.
Firstly, women have substantially raised their standards since they hold more professional degrees, compared to counterparts. So females are landing decent jobs that have eventually subjected them to out-earn men, shrinking the obsession of relying on a man for financial support through marriage like in previous times. Secondly, by getting married, the vast majority of women do not want to follow the pattern everyone follows. In other words, the social norms of wifedom are being widely considered to be an utter disgrace. For instance, while wives are anticipated to treat their husbands like incompetent children in domestic matters, little is expected of men. Moreover, employers view married men as truly responsible. On the other hand, females are reckoned with distrust by management because it is assumed that they will soon start having babies and put a top priority to children over work. Therefore, women prefer to enjoy complete freedom by staying single instead.
Thirdly, as females can have a baby without remaining wedded, the marriage unquestionably deems to appear absolutely trivial for them nowadays. Thanks to technology such as in vitro fertilisation (IVF) and sperm banks, which have made perfectly possible for single mums to give birth to babies. To add to this, the improved effectiveness and availability of abortion, the marriage has become increasingly obsolete in numerous countries, and ironically this type of culture is being accepted by multiple nations. Last but not least, women are now living in the Dating Apocalypse. Dating applications like Tinder has created an easier outlook for quick hookups. As a consequence, many females cling to singlehood because they are satisfied sexually through the available technology. This ascertains why the idea of marrying up is vanished in females.
In conclusion, presumably, technology and liberty are as decisive as financial stability in making marriage undesirable for women.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The structure of the essay is not correct and not well organized.
1. the second paragraph should agree that :
woman no longer feel the need to get married because woman are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring.
then give two reasons to support this opinion. so this is out of topic:
Secondly, by getting married, the vast majority of women do not want to follow the pattern everyone follows. In other words, the social norms of wifedom are being widely considered to be an utter disgrace. For instance, while wives are anticipated to treat their husbands like incompetent children in domestic matters, little is expected of men.
2. In the beginning of the third paragraph, should be something like:
However, financial security is not the only reason. There are more reasons like:
reason 1: females are reckoned with distrust by management because it is assumed that they will soon start having babies...
reason 2: as females can have a baby without remaining wedded,...
...
while you don't have this transition sentence.
3. 'On the other hand' means 'However'. It doesn't mean 'On another hand'.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1940 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.215 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.76 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.365 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.254 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.431 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... making marriage undesirable for women.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38978494624 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85632542338 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64247311828 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7667349726 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.25 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14315125327 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370888736876 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370657282559 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864362604323 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366382896342 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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